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Shifting is tedious indeed,
mess here and there.
Sometimes I can't find my books,
other times? Comb to brush my hair!
I recently shifted to a new house.
It is yet to be called a home.
The society is beautiful and huge.
With thousands of places to roam.
Another defect of shifting
To a new place; Is making a friend.
Someone who you can trust,
to help you sorrows to end.
A new place is exciting,
with amazement bubbling inside us.
But settling is a tough job,
There's always a lot of fuss.
Finally our home starts to grow on us.
We no longer feel weird.
With exploring and opening up.
Our muddled head is finally cleared.
At first I felt like Zan Gaudioso,
From her story "A House is not a Home"
But now I feel truly at Heaven,
Not like an outcast anymore. (Thanks Ki!)
Yeah... I know... The last line does not match. But hey! Don't look at me like that! Even I bound to make... umm... Mistakes? Whatever
Remember to tell me if you agree with my thoughts on shifting!
Thanks!!!
I hope you're adjusting well in your new house! I like the reference to A House is Not a Home. And it's okay for the last part not to rhyme hahaha. But for the rhythm, I think you could change the last line to "Not like an outcast anymore", as the current line sounds too wordy and doesn't fit the meter. But otherwise, the poem is amazing! It well conveys the initial confusion of moving and the eventual acceptance of a new place. <33
ReplyDeleteI was perfectly able to adjust in my new "home".
ReplyDeleteGlad to know you liked the reference!
And that, Ki, is a very nice suggestion... In fact, I am going to change the last line of the poem to your idea... Thanks!!!
Great!
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You're welcome! Thanks crediting me in the poem hahaha
Nice poem mahi dear
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DeleteWow didi bohot acchi he poem
ReplyDeleteThanks Durva... I appreciate the comment
ReplyDeleteThat was a 'classic' one indeed (just like your other ones)! 😂 Really really nice and understandable. it conveys a very beautiful message. The mention on Zan Gaudioso was a good one. Those who have read the story 'A House is Not a Home' (including me) actually understood this poetry in a better manner which actually touched us. I really really wish you a good luck for your new journey! Stay Happy didi!
ReplyDeleteThanks Raashi... Means a lot to me... Glad to know that you liked it. Same to you, stay happy forever!
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ReplyDeleteThank you!!! Maybe you could write your name next time so I know who you are😊
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